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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

More and more people ore using the internet to do their tasks rather then doing in person. (e.g. banking, shopping, hotel booking etc. ). Do the advantages of this trend outweighs the disadvantages?

Nowadays, there are more and more
people
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intelligence
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 lots of help for
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both advantages and disadvantages, and state my perspective
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,
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asually
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actually
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amount
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 benefits for
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.
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datas
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data
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causes
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lots
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 of time.
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 or new AI software, we can finish the
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Interenet
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Internet
also
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individual
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 to boost their
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 quality. By using
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 to search
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for informations
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informations
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information
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comparison
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value
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importance
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quentity
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quantity
. The help from
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make
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people
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convenient
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, the
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come
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 with negative effects for individuals.
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people
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. Through the
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significant
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,
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people
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 with real
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. With the
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convenience
 of online process, individuals do not need to have a
communcation
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communication
 in person. These issues make
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of deeply
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releationships
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relationships
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, I think
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disadvantages
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advantages
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people
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save
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disadvantages
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siginficantly
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significantly
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 of critical thinking skills and connection
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releationships
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relationships
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language
Fix many spelling and grammar mistakes so the write read easy.
structure
Make a plan before you write. Start with a short intro, then two parts for pros and cons, then a clear end.
content
Give one strong idea in each paragraph. Use a small example to show a point.
content
State your view in the end. Do not say only the good and the bad; add your own view clearly.
structure
The writer tries to show both sides and own view.
content
Some idea is clear and task is to talk on the topic.
content
Some use of simple facts as examples.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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