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Band 4

Some parents guide their children's education towards specific careers, such as in engineering, medicine, or law. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child who has this kind of parental guidance?

there
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 is no denying that some parents guide their children's education towards specific
careers
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what
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 I think they might consider
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apply
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as
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whoever
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, most
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parents
those
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 days are more supportive
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of
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 their
child
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children's
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hoppies
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hopes
 and dreams.
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to
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 begin with, children
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 have been raised toward specific careers
such
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 as engineering and medicine often get higher
gardes
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grades
 than
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which
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gived
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gives
 them higher
opputiunity
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opportunities
 to be accepted
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prestige's
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 universities.
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, those
childrens
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children
 will be well educated and will have an increased
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percentage
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 a better university.

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Plan a short plan at the start. Say what you will talk about and keep to it.
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Try to give both good and bad sides. State your view clearly.
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Use short, simple words. Check spelling and grammar.
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Use linking words to show flow, like also, but, then, for example.
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Give one or two clear facts or examples to back each point.
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The essay shows a topic idea about parents guiding kids to jobs.
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There is an attempt to show how this might help a child.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • parental guidance
  • specialization
  • high performing careers
  • competitive environments
  • skills and knowledge
  • exploration
  • interests
  • talents
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • passions
  • abilities
  • creativity
  • resentment
  • controlling
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