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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.

The graph given below shows the
number
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 of library
books
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 read by
boys
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 and
girls
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 at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.
It
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apply
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the 2009 to
2010
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2010,
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girls
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wear reading
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read
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books
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 more than
boys
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. But in 2011 they
becom
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became
same
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the same
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numbers
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number
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 of
books
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 read. And in
the
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apply
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2012
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2012,
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girls
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get
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got
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 80
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number of
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apply
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books
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 read.
we
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We
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 can see that
girls
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 in 2012
they get
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got
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lower
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a lower
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number
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. The
boys
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they get
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got
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 high in the
last
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to
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two
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 years
2011
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, 2011
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 and 2012.
Linking Words
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However
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however
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however,
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boys
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are
Verb problem
read
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the
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a
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 high
number
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 of
books
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read
Verb problem
apply
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, boys, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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