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Band 8

You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You know find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter in your tutor. Write a letter -describe the situation -explain why you cannot continue at this time - say what action you would like to take

Dear John, I am writing to inform you about my discontinuation from the evening classes
due to
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 work demands. At the start of
this
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 month, I was reassigned to a new department in my paid job. I sat down with the manager to request some
time
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 out in the evenings to pursue my
further
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 studies, but he frankly explained to me that it was not possible to allocate
such
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time
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due to
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 the rising demand for nighttime services by our customers.
As a result
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, I am not able to continue attending your tutorials anymore because doing so could lead to the company terminating my employment contract. I have a plethora of bills that I must pay, including my mortgage and car loan, and I desperately need the job at the moment. My wish is to return to the university to continue with my studies once things settle at work. In the meantime, the aim is to continue reading during my spare
time
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 to keep up with the evolving debates in the field. I hope it is not a problem if I reach out to you unofficially when I encounter pressing questions. Let me express my sincere gratitude to you for the
time
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 you spent teaching us. I look forward to reading your response. Yours sincerely, Phillip

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coherence suggestion
Keep each paragraph to one main idea and use short, clear sentences.
task suggestion
Make the reason and action clearer in a final line or sentence so the tutor knows what you want next.
vocabulary suggestion
Avoid long words; use simple words and plain style.
structure suggestion
Check that the subject and the request are obvious in the first or second paragraph.
tone strength
The letter stays polite and formal.
content strength
It clearly states why you stop and what you plan to do next.
structure strength
The greeting and closing are correct for a formal letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • juggle multiple commitments
  • recent increase in workload
  • intense/stressful period
  • unmanageable schedule
  • withdraw from the course
  • regretfully cannot continue
  • postpone my studies
  • alternative arrangements
  • flexible study options
  • additional responsibilities
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