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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You know find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter in your tutor. Write a letter -describe the situation -explain why you cannot continue at this time - say what action you would like to take

Dear Mrs Tom, I am writing in
regards
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regard
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 to
discontinuation
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the discontinuation
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 of my evening course. I am sorry because I will not be able to continue with it. For the
last
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 couple of months have been struggling to get the school fees since my mother has been in and out of the hospital
and
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, and
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 I am the only one offering financial aid because the insurance can not cover her chronic illness. My pockets have run dry
and
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, and
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 it is becoming hard to continue with the training. I was determined to complete the training by the end of
this
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 year,
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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 it will not happen.
For
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this
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 reason, I kindly beg to
deffer
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defer
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with
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apply
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the course for one year and by that time, it's my hope I will have gotten school fees for the whole semester. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Jane Njeru.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use one clear idea in one paragraph. Check small errors like 'deffer' and 'regards' to make it formal.
task response
For task response, add a simple plan at the end, such as when you hope to rejoin and how you will sort fees.
task response
Keep a formal tone all through. Avoid very casual phrases like 'my pockets have run dry'.
task response
Proofread for grammar and spelling to make the letter easy to read.
tone
Polite opening and closing show good respect to the tutor.
content
The letter explains the reason and the action you want clearly.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • juggle multiple commitments
  • recent increase in workload
  • intense/stressful period
  • unmanageable schedule
  • withdraw from the course
  • regretfully cannot continue
  • postpone my studies
  • alternative arrangements
  • flexible study options
  • additional responsibilities
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