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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The present image illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 living in
India
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 and
China
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 since the year 2000 until today. Predictions of the increase
of
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in
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 the population to 2050 are
also
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 shown. In the year 2000,
China
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 had a larger population, that being 1,250
billion
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people
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. 10 years later, the number went up by 100
billion
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people
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.
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,
India
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's number of citizens was 1000
billion
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,
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however
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, by 2030, it is estimated to have the same amount of
humans
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people
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 living there
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China
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as in China
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. It is believed that when 2050 is
reached
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reached,
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India
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's statistics will be amazingly higher than
the
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those
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other
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of other
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country
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countries
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. Not only will the
quantity
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number
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 of
persons
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people
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 go up in
India
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, but
China
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's will decrease. The graph allows us
to conclude
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 that
India
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 will continue to gain
habitants
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inhabitants
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,
in contrast
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 to
China
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's decay.
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,
China
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 will still have an enormous amount of
people
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with
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, with
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 an
estimate
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estimated
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of
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apply
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1,400
billion
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 by 2050.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, india, china, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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