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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
population
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 of
china
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China
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 and India have changed significantly since the
year
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 2000 and is projected to keep changing from
present
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the present
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 time up to the
year
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 2050. The graph shows that in the
year
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 2000 China had more than 1,200 Billion of total
population
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,
while
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on the other hand
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 India had only 1000 Billion
people
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, As the years went Indias
population
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 Increased Exponantialy, by 2010 their
population
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 was almost 1,200
Bilion
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, and the growth didn´t stop at that moment, 10 years later in 2020 they were more than 1,300
Bilion
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.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 they are 1,400
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Bilion
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billion
people
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, < 100
milion
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million
 more
that
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than
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 what they were 25 years ago,
ther
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their
population
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 is expected to continue rising, the graph shows that by 2050
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population
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the population
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 should be 1600
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Bilion
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billion
. On the other side, China
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, that
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that
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which
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 started with more
people
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, their
population
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hasen't
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hasn't
 changed as much
, in
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. In
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 the
year
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2000
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2000,
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 they had more than 1200
Bilion
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people
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,
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. Then
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then
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then,
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 their
population
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rised
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rose
and
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, and
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 they started the next decade with 1300
people
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,
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.
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and
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apply
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on
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In
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2020
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2020,
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 they kept growing
and
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, and
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 they started the
year
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 with more than 1,100
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Bilion
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billion
,
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.
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in contrast
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 to India
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, Chinas
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Chinas
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China's
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population
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 is expected to decrease by 2050, by that
year
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 they are projected to have a decrease of 200
Milion
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Million
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, year, people, bilion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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