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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the changes in the populations of
India
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 and
China
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 from the year 2000 to 2050.
Overall
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,
China
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 started with a larger
population
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 than
India
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;
however
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,
India
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 is expected to pass
China
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 in the future
while
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it's
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its
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people
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population
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 continues to grow
and
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, and
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China
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's
community
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population
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 begins to decrease. In 2000,
China
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 had a larger group of approximately 1.25 billion people.
On the other hand
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,
India
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 had a lower
population
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 of around 1 billion people. As the years passed, both groups showed a steady increase until about 2032, where they
intersect
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intersected
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.
Although
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 both countries experienced
population
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 growth,
China
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's rate was slower. Meanwhile,
India
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 grew faster despite starting with a smaller
population
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. After 2032,
the
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apply
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things begin to change, as
China
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's
population
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 slightly declines,
whereas
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India
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's
population
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 continues with a steady growth. In conclusion, even though
India
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initiated with
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had
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 a
minor
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smaller
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population
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 than
China
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, there was a significant change over time.
India
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 is predicted to continue growing at a steady pace,
while
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China
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's society is expected to decrease gradually.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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