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Band 2

Some people think that school and government should take responsibility to transport children to school. While some people think that parents should get children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Some
people
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belive
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believe
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 that educational
institue
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institutions
 and
authorites
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authorities
 should take
responsiblity
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responsibility
 to
transport
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children
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 to
school
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.
while
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 others
belive
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believe
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 that parents should get
children
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 to
school
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.
This
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 essay
explain
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explains
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 both sides of
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the arugment
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arugment
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argument
 and
conculed
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concludes
 with my own opinion.
Body paragraph 1
As
a tax payees
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taxpayers
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,
People
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has
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have
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 a right to get the
transport
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 facility for their
children
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 to go to
school
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 . In other
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words
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word
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word,
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 it is
the one of
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one of the
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 reasons that
community
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the community
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 pay
the
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apply
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taxes
to
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apply
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to the government.
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Moreover
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 it
is
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apply
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helps
people
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 to save some money that they have to spend on
transport
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.
Accoding
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According
 to
the
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apply
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some
report
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reports
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the
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, the
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transport
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 cost is the third
hight
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highest
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 cost
people
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has
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have
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 to spend in their
day to day
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day-to-day
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 life. So it is a major
benift sociaty
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benefit society
 can get from the government.
Conclusion
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, some
people
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belive
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believe
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its a
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it's
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 best to get their
children
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 to
school
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and
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, and
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 it can protect them from harm
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such
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, such
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 as drugs or attack.

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structure
Plan a clear start, middle and end. State your view in the final line.
content
Explain one strong point for each side and add a short own view.
language
Check spelling, grammar, and sign use (punct).
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the topic.
content
There is a hint of your view and some cost/safety points are mentioned.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • school
  • government
  • parents
  • children
  • transport
  • bus
  • walk
  • cycle
  • car
  • route
  • distance
  • safety
  • cost
  • money
  • support
  • equal
  • need
  • plan
  • policy
  • program
  • option
  • independence
  • attendance
  • access
  • safety
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