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The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table chart illustrates how the proportion of
women
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 aged 40 to 44 years, by number of offspring, changed from 1981 to 2006 in Australia.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the figure for more than three
children
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 declined considerably over time.
However
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, the number of
women
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 with no
children
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 or 1 to 2
children
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 increased gradually, and
women
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 with two
children
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 were the most common. In detail,
women
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 aged 40 to 44 years in Australia who had two
children
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 reached a high of 29
percent
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 in 1981 and increased significantly to 35.6
percent
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 by 1986. After that, the figure rose slightly to 38.3
percent
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 by the end of the period. The proportions of
women
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 with no
children
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 or one child increased slowly from 8.5
percent
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 and 7.6
percent
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 to 15.9
percent
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 and 13.2
percent
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
women
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 with four or more
children
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 was the second-highest at 27.6
percent
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 in 1981. It decreased rapidly to 11
percent
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, the lowest level in 2006.
Women
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 with three
children
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 accounted for 27.4
percent
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 in 1981 and fell gradually to 21.5
percent
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 in 2006, but ranked second-highest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, children, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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