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Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
I think traffic and housing problems
is
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are
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 big
problem
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problems
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 in big
citys
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cities
. Some
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peopel
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people
 say
moveing
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moving
 big
companis
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companies
 and
factorys
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factories
 to
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countryside
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the countryside
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 is
good
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a good
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 idea. I agree with
this
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 idea because it
help
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helps
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city
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the city
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 and
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peopel
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people
.
Body paragraph 1
First,
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citys
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cities
 now have too many cars and big traffic. Every day
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peopel
Correct your spelling
people
 go to work and waste many time
in
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on
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roads
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the roads
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. If big
companis
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companies
 move to
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countryside
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the countryside
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, many workers
also
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 move there.
This
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make
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makes
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city
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 roads
emptyer
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emptier
and
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, and
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air
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the air
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 will be
clean
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cleaner
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. In small
villages
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villages,
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 have many space for
build
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building
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 big
factorys
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factories
.
This
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 is good for nature and
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city
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the city
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 not
be
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to be
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 too crowded.
Body paragraph 2
Second,
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house
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price
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prices
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 in
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city
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the city
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is
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are
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 very high. Poor
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peopel
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people
 cannot buy
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house
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a house
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 because it
cost
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costs
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much
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a lot of
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 money. In
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Correct article usage
the countryside
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countryside
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countryside,
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 land is cheap
and
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, and
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house
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houses
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is
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are
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 cheap too. If employees move to
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countryside
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the countryside
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, they can buy
big
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a big
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house
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 for
family
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their family
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. They live
happy
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a happy
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 life with fresh air and green trees.
Also
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,
moveing companis
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moving companies
 give jobs to
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peopel
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people
 who live in
village
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the village
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. They
dont
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don't
 need to go
city
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for
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to
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 find work.
Conclusion
In
conculasion
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conclusion
, I
realy
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really
 agree
moveing
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moving
 big business to
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countryside
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the countryside
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. It
solve
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solves
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traffic
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the traffic
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 jam and
houseing
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housing
 problem.
Citys
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Cities
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 become better
place
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places
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 and
village
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villages
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 become
more rich
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richer
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. Even
it
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though it
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 is hard
for
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to
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 start,
but
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apply
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it is good for
future
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the future
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 of
evryone
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everyone
.

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language
Fix many spelling and form errors to be clear.
structure
Make one clear idea per paragraph and add a simple link word to the next paragraph.
content
Give real, small facts or proof for each point to make it strong.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences to avoid big mistakes.
task
Clear view is shown; you say you agree.
content
You use two main reasons to back your view.
coherence
You give an idea of how the change may help people.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • housing problems
  • countryside
  • large companies
  • factories
  • employees
  • urban areas
  • land availability
  • relocate
  • stimulate economic development
  • challenges
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • rural areas
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