The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.

The table illustrates the
personel
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personal
calories
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gain
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gained
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from consumption
from
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of
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Rice
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,
wheat
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and
Maize
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per day in five different countries.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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cambodia
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Cambodia
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has the highest
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calories
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calorie
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consumption
while
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poland
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Poland
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had the lowest usage.
In addition
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, People from
cambodi
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Cambodia
take
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the
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highgest
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highest
calories
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form
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from
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rice
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1445
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, 1445
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and polened and
egypt
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Egypt
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from
wheat
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respectively
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865and
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, 865and
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1095,
mexico
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Mexico
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from
maize
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1083
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
Maize
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consuption
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consumption
in
poland
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Poland
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is zero
and
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, and
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they are the people
take
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who take
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the
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lowest
caloris
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calories
from
out of
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apply
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thses foure
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these four
countries.
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However
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egypt
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Egypt
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has the most
balance
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diate becouse
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diet because
they have taken
calories
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from all three types of food
respectively
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, respectively
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Rice
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, Rice
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501,
wheat
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1095 and
Maize
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578.
Cambodi
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Cambodia
get
lowest
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the lowest
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calaories
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calories
from
wheat
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while
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, while
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mexico
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Mexico
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get
it
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them
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from
rice
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words calories, rice, wheat, maize with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rice
  • wheat
  • maize
  • country
  • countries
  • four
  • eat
  • eating
  • eaten
  • most
  • least
  • more
  • less
  • big
  • small
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • decrease
  • fall
  • change
  • pattern
  • trend
  • compare
  • difference
  • food
  • diet
  • table
  • data
  • numbers
  • overall
  • across
  • in
  • each
  • country
  • main
  • reason
  • climate
  • income
  • price
  • culture
  • effect
  • cause
  • therefore
  • there are
  • there is
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