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The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The
line
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 graph
provide
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provides
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 key information about the number of
telephone
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 calls in the UK over the
period
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 from 1995 to 2002. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
telephone
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 calls by local-fixed
line
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 recorded the highest figures of the
period
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,
whereas
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by
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those by
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mobiles
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mobile
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 had the lowest values. In general, most categories experienced an upward trend throughout the
period
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. Looking at the details, in 1995, the figure for local-fixed
line
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 stood at approximately 72
minutes
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, making it the most significant category.
This
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 was followed by National and
International-fixed
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International fixed
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line
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wich
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which
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 accounted for around 36
minutes
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.
In contrast
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, the calls by
mobiles
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mobile
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was
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were
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 the lowest throughout the year, starting at just 3
minutes
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.
By contrast
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, the
telephone
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 calls by local-fixed
line
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 witnessed a steady growth throughout the
period
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, and
its
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their
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 figures increased to end at 72
minutes
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 in the final year. Regarding the
telephone
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 calls by mobiles, it showed a decrease, eventually reaching 42
minutes
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.
Consequently
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, the gap between the highest and lowest categories widened significantly by the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, telephone, period, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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