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With the recent improvements to internet , people can leave views or opinions on goods or services they have purchased. Is it a good or a bad thing , discuss both giving your own answer with example.

It is widely acknowledged that one of the most important developments in our world
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 the 20th century is the internet.
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 is no doubt about that. Nowadays, we have the option to leave a review
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 the website to recommend the product if
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 good or bad.
To begin
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 with,I would like to talk about the
benefices
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benefits
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 that the internet and communication networks bring to society.
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improvment
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improvement
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today
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that today
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the
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people can save a lot of time to buy what they need from
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their
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 home. Another positive consequence is
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that your
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your
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you
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 can choose many products and see the context and information about the product you want to buy. In other
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, you can choose
free
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 when no pressure at all.
On the other hand
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, if you choose live and insolate life
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 the negative issue.
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,
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people in the long run keeping alone, could
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develop
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 mental illness, like desorden mental health
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disorders.
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Furthermore
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, I would like to add that if the person starts to buy everything they need online from your home and lives that way lonely they
maybe
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lost
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lose
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 immediately in contact with society
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immediately.
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 In conclusion, we have to
make
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strike
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 a balance in our lives between
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using
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 technology to improve our
job
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jobs
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 and
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family
share
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 in
the
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our
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 free time.
This
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 balance gives us
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good health and satisfaction with our
life manner
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lifestyle
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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it throughout. Give one main opinion and back it with one or two examples.
organization
Divide your essay into four parts: intro, two body parts, and a short conclusion. Each part should have one clear idea.
cohesion
Use simple link words to show cause, effect, and contrast, such as 'also', 'but', 'so', and 'for example'.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Make sure verbs fit in tense and nouns with 's' when needed. Read aloud to find errors.
ideas
Give clear examples. Try not to speak many ideas at once; keep one idea per sentence.
vocabulary
Use easy words. If you are not sure of a word, use a simpler one.
structure
The writer tries to discuss both sides of the topic.
cohesion
There are some linking words to show how ideas connect.
content
The ending gives a call to balance use of tech and family life.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Customer feedback
  • Transparency
  • Business reputation
  • Fake reviews
  • Consumer empowerment
  • Influence
  • Customer satisfaction
  • Trust
  • Market competition
  • Online marketplace
  • Consumer experience
  • Mitigate damage
  • Biased reviews
  • Evaluate
  • Improve offerings
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