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Band 6.5

The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.

The line graph illustrates how many tonnes
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product
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products
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 of
paper
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 and packaging,
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sown-wood
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sawn-wood
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, and wood pulp industries in the UK between 1980 and 2000.
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, it is clear from
graph
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the graph
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 that the
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preodction
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production
 of
paper
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 and packaging experienced a significant
increased
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increase
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 over the period,
while
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 the wood pulp and
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sown-wood
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sawn-wood
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preodction
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production
 had decreased. Focusing on 
paper
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 and packaging and 
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sown-wood
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saw-wood
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preodction
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production
 at the beginning of the period, the
famer
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farmer
 has the highest products at around 225
million
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 tonnes, followed by the latter at 200 
million
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. After 1980, the
numbers
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number
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 of
product
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products
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the
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in the
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paper
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 and packaging
has
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industry has
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increaed
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increased
 over 10 years to
becomes at
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reach
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 250 
million
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the
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then
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has
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jumped to 350 
million
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 in 2000. In
consrat
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contrast
, the
sown-wood
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preodction
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production
 has
drop
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dropped
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steady
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 over 20 years to
has
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have
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 the lowest at about 130
million
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.
Turing
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 to wood pulp, the period covered by the graph shows some fluctuation from around 160
million
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 tonnes in 1980 to
approximalty
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approximately
 155 
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, sown-wood, preodction, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • production
  • paper
  • wood pulp
  • sawn-wood
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • significant
  • turning point
  • correlation
  • inverse relationship
  • environmental policy
  • demand
  • technological advancements
  • implications
  • projections
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