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Writing Samples
Band 1

A global trade increases between countries ,many daily necessities are produced in other countries .Such goods are usually transported a long distance .do the benefits of this trend outweigh it's drawbacks? Opinion,the advantage and disadvantages.

int One of the disadvantages of trading goods globally is
:
Punctuation problem
apply
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 pollution, where the ships
whom
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that
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transporting
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transport
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 the goods will generate,
by
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apply
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hurting
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harming
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 the sea animals and plants.
Linking Words
Also
Add a comma
Also,
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 the
time
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that
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apply
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it
take
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takes
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 from
a
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one
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distination
Correct your spelling
destination
 to another,
for example
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, the shipping
time
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 from
china
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China
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 to
canada
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Canada
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 is 35-50 days, which is a big amount of
time
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,
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;
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howerver
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however
, if you ship it by plane
it
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, it
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 will be much less
time
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, but the cost will rise
significantely
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significantly
.
On the other hand
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, the advantages are
much
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many
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 more, it will guarantee us better quality for the needs, since the
competetion
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competition
 will be serious. And the cost
including
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, including
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 the shipping
fees
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fees,
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 might be less,
while
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 there are a lot of
countrys
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countries
have
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that have
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 cheaper costs on manufacturing.
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Also
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Also,
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 one of the most important
advanteges
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advantages
 is the jobs that will be generated, since the whole world is
you
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your
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 customer.

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structure
Plan your answer first. Start with a short line that states your view, then give two or three clear points, and finish with a short ending.
structure
Try to have one idea in each paragraph. Use short, direct sentence and link words to show order.
task
Make your view clear in the opening or the first few lines.
language
Use simple link words to join ideas, like Also, But, For example, Therefore.
language
Check spelling and grammar so words are easy to read.
content
You talk about both sides of the topic.
evidence
You give a real time example for shipping.
cohesion
You use contrast words to show two sides.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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