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The line graph shows the percentage change in the prices of three metals—copper, nickel and zinc—compared with the previous month over a one-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the monthly percentage change in the
prices
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 of
copper
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,
nickel
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 and zinc over a one-
year
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 period.
Overall
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,
nickel
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 experienced the most dramatic fluctuations throughout the
year
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,
whereas
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copper
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 showed relatively minor changes. Zinc,
on the other hand
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, followed a moderate pattern with both rises and falls. At the beginning of the
year
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, the price of
nickel
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 rose sharply, reaching a peak of around 6% in January, before dropping steadily to approximately 1% by April.
This
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 downward trend continued, and
nickel
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 recorded its lowest point at about –3% in June.
Although
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prices
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 recovered slightly in the following months,
nickel
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 remained volatile and ended the
year
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 with a modest increase.
In contrast
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,
copper
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 showed far more stability. Its price changes generally fluctuated between 0% and 1%, with only a slight decline in May and June. From July onwards,
copper
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prices
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 recovered gradually and remained relatively steady until December. Meanwhile, zinc saw moderate fluctuations. After an initial increase early in the
year
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,
prices
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 declined in the middle months before rising again towards the end of the
year
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, finishing at around 2% in December.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, copper, nickel, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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