IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
Linking Words
 digital world of technologies,
people
Use synonyms
 prefer to coordinate virtually rather than being in
Use synonyms
office
Correct article usage
the office
show examples
,
Punctuation problem
;
show examples
therefore
Linking Words
, more
companies
Use synonyms
 allow their employees to
work
Use synonyms
 remotely,
while
Linking Words
 other
companies
Use synonyms
 prefer their employees to
work
Use synonyms
 in
Use synonyms
office
Correct article usage
the office
show examples
 as it provides
professional
Correct article usage
a professional
show examples
 environment to
work
Use synonyms
 peacefully.
Linking Words
However
Add a comma
However,
show examples
i
Fix capitalization
I
show examples
 would consider
this
Linking Words
 as an advantage. On the one hand, professionals working in the
office
Use synonyms
 can
concerate
Correct your spelling
concentrate
 on their
work
Use synonyms
 and deadlines very keenly without any
interuptions
Correct your spelling
interruptions
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
 it helps them to achieve their target.
they
Fix capitalization
They
show examples
 process ideas more calmly and focus on the relevant
work
Use synonyms
 only.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
 who
work
Use synonyms
 remotely have plenty of options where they can choose to
work
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, they can
work
Use synonyms
 remotely from any cafe that provides
safe
Correct article usage
a safe
show examples
 and peaceful workspace, they can
work
Use synonyms
 from their house's drawing room, they are not restricted to
Use synonyms
work
Replace the word
working
show examples
 on proper working hours as long as
they
Use the right word
the
show examples
work
Use synonyms
 is being done and
deadline
Fix the agreement mistake
deadlines
show examples
 are being met. In my
opnion
Correct your spelling
opinion
, more
companies
Use synonyms
 should implement
this
Linking Words
 policy as it makes
people
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
hassle free
Use the right word
hassle-free
show examples
 and with better mental space
,
Punctuation problem
. Companies
show examples
companies
Use synonyms
 should even provide gadgets to
work
Use synonyms
. All in all, remote
works
Fix the agreement mistake
work
show examples
 gives
people
Use synonyms
 freedom of choice, time and commute, it saves so much expense of travelling to and from
Use synonyms
office
Correct article usage
the office
show examples
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

structure
Plan your essay with a clear plan. Start with what you think, then say why. End with a short conclusion.
content
Give both sides. Then say which side is stronger. Use one or two facts or ideas to back each point.
language
Polish language. Check grammar, spell twice, and use simple, easy words.
content
The idea that remote work can give freedom and save time is clear.
content
You show many places to work from, not just the office.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote working
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • distractions
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • office space
  • commuting
  • professional wardrobe
  • boundary
  • burnout
  • face-to-face interaction
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • isolation
  • workplace culture
What to do next:
Look at other essays: