The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the changes in the total population
fo
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New
York
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City
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from 1800 to 2000 and five
districts
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of the
city
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. Overview,
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table below shows
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New
York
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City
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in all five
districts
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plus
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the
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manhattan
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Manhattan
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and other
districts
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of
brooklyn
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Brooklyn
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,
bronx
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Bronx
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,
queens
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Queens
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,and
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Staten Island
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. The first
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districts
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start
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in 1800
and
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the population was about 80,000.After 100
years
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years,
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it was a big
developing
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it
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. It
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was about
3,500,000
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3,500,000,
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this
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which
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is a big number.
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,
in2000
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in 2000
was one of the bid increases
at
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New
York
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City
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. In
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Manhattan
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manhattan
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manhattan,
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it was less than in New
York
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,so it
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with 76% total population,but it
was
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decreases
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on
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the other
yeras
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years
it
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; it
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was a big shock.
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,
on
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the other
districts
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we hope they will be
increases
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increased
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but
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unfortunately the percentage was
reducer
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more than the
manhattan
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Manhattan
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,so in 1800 it
about
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is about
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quarter
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a quarter
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percentage and
this
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is more
unstabel
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unstable
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words york, city, districts with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • city
  • five
  • district
  • grow
  • growth
  • rise
  • increase
  • increase
  • rise
  • fall
  • decline
  • high
  • low
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • more
  • less
  • over time
  • by year
  • in total
  • compare
  • compared with
  • whereas
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • feature
  • note
  • point
  • difference
  • lead
  • catch up
  • late
  • early
  • century
  • decade
  • period
  • 2000
  • 1800
  • 1900
  • continuous
  • steady
  • rapid
  • fast
  • slow
  • periods
  • numbers
  • data
  • report
  • describe
  • summarise
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