The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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the
percentage
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of four types of materials reused between 1982 to 2010 in a specific country.
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Overall
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Overall,
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the
percentage
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of Paper & Cardboard, glass containers and Plastics fluctuated slightly
while
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the
aluminium
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cans
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percentage
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rocketed. What springs to mind is that the papers & cardboard rate is the highest over
all
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apply
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the
period
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entire period
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, it is above 60% . The second highest rate
are
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is
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the glass containers
percentage
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which
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, which
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tart
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started
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to decrease
but
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, but
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after 1990 it gradually
increase
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increased
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until 60% .
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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the 2 lowest
line
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lines
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are the
Aluminium
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cans
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and Plastics.
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However
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However,
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the line
shart
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sharply
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demonstrate
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demonstrates
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a huge difference between the evolution
Plastics
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of Plastics
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and
Aluminin
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aluminium
cans
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. The
Aluminium
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cans
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can
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rate rocketed from 5% to 45%
while
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Plastic
remain
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remained
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almost
same
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the same
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, it
increase
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increased
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very marginally
beginning
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, beginning
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at 5% to almost 10% . Paper & Cardboard were the most recycled material in
this
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period
but
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, but
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the
Aluminium
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cans
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, aluminium, cans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rocketed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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