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Writing Samples
Band 2

Now a days more and more people are migrating to developed countries for higher education and better employment opportunities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this type of migration?

While
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 having
a
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dinner at a
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dinner
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 at restaurant is a good choice, I would
perfer
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prefer
potluck
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a potluck
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dinner
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.
This
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 will
a
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create a
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sense of community and
strengthn
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strengthen
 the interpersonal
relationship
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relationships
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 among employees.
To begin
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 with, in
potluck
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a potluck
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dinner
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workers
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, workers
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 would bring a
varietu
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variety
 of
cusines
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cuisines
 because they came from
a
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apply
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different
background
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backgrounds
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which
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, which
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 helps them to build a sense of community.
For instance
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, people have to bring one dish
which
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, which
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 could be their traditional dish too,
this
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 allows them to know their different backgrounds.
Moreover
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,
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this
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these
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dinner
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 gatherings
allows
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allow
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 them to know each other and make good connections with other
co workers
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coworkers
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.
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,
while
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 sharing food
colleagues
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, colleagues
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 will talk and share their ideas
which
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, which
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 allows them to understand and build
a
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apply
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strong interpersonal relationships. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 would say
thanku
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thank
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you to
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to get
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for getting
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 my opinion
and
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, and
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 I will wait for your final decision. Please let
my
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me
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 know if you need any kind of help to make the
arrangments
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arrangements
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.

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grammar/vocabulary
Use short, clear sentences. Check spellings and form.
content
Add a clear view of both good and bad sides. Now you give only good points.
structure
Break your writing into 4 small parts: intro, 2 body paragraphs, conclusion.
grammar
Make sure to use the right word: 'these dinner gatherings' not 'this dinner gatherings'.
content
You show a choice for potluck in the intro.
structure
You use 'To begin with', 'Moreover', 'In conclusion' to move ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Developed countries
  • Higher education
  • Employment opportunities
  • Brain drain
  • Professional growth
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intercultural understanding
  • Economic burden
  • Work exploitation
  • Competitive job market
  • Renowned companies
  • Personal growth
  • Skilled individuals
  • Developmental stagnation
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