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Band 5.5

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 an industrial area in the city of Norbiton, and the future plan of the site after development.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the industrial area will transform completely by
addition
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the addition
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 of two roads, houses,
school
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a school
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 and
medical
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a medical
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 centre.
Recourding
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Referring
 to the
data
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data,
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 it displays that it will be a
speace
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space
 for shops and a playground. In
details
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detail
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, it is planned to add
road
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a road
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 in the north way across the river with an extra road in the
nourthwest
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northwestern
.
In contrast
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, the eastern side will have a large playground and a school building surrounded by new brand houses.
However
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, there will be an area for shops in the south with
addition
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the addition
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 of
medical
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a medical
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 centre in the corner.
Also
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,
a
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apply
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new three
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three new
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 houses beside the river in the
nourthwest
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north west
. Meanwhile, there will be a house along the new road with a view
to
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of
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 the farmland
that is
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 in the east.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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