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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Write 150 words.

The bar chart illustrates data on the percentage of females going into higher
education
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 in
USA
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the USA
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, UK,
AUSTRALIA
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, SOUTH KOREA and FRANCE for the years 1980 and 2015.
Overall
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, female school-leavers going into higher
education
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 accounted
the
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for the
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 highest proportion in all five countries for the year 2015
and
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, and
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 in 1980 accounted for the least proportion. Meanwhile,
Australia
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 remained the same in both years. In detail, it can be seen that in
1980
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1980,
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 women's who went into higher
education
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 in
Australia
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have
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had
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 the biggest percentage at just under 60% and France came next at 50%.
Moreover
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,
UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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 were just under 40%
while
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 South Korea were the lowest in all five countries.
In contrast
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,
it is clear that
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 in 2015 women's going to study higher
education
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have
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has
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 increased dramatically in all five
contries
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countries
.
However
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, in the UK, USA,
AUSTRALIA
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 AND FRANCE were the highest with
percentage
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a percentage
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 just under 60% for all of them
except
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, except
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 SOUTH KOREA was the lowest at 30%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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