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Band 4.5

Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir, I am
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 letter to suggest someone who is worthy
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 the award. His name is Nimrat Singh
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 the founder of Khalsa Aid . He has been selflessly helping our community and people around the world
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 when faced with any
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. He and his team
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 proactively participated in a lot of charity work as well. Recently, when our province faced floods
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 there was
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 of basic
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necessities
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 as food, water and
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 his team significantly helped
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empower
 people and made valuable contributions to our community. I
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strongly
 intend that he should be appreciated and rewarded for his actions for
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decade.
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 that we could tell him we are really proud of him for being
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 part of our community.
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 believe
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award
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 should be something valuable and something that he will remember
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such
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 a trip tickets. I hope you will take
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 into consideration and decide with your team. Yours Faithfully Jmes Smith

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task response
The task asks you to name who should get the award, say what they do for the community, and suggest a real type of award. Your letter mentions these ideas but does not clearly put them in a strong plan. Be clear on three parts: who, what they do, and the prize.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is not easy to read in places. Put one main idea in each paragraph, and use simple linking words to show how the ideas join. Use short, plain sentences.
content
You name a real person and a charity group, which shows you know the local work.
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You describe a time when the group helped people in floods, showing the impact of their work.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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