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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months • say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about a request of visiting to
the
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visit the
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headquaters
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headquarters
 of our office
which
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, which
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 is located
at
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in
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 London, UK. The reason behind my visit is to get an understanding
,
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apply
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 and learning about the latest technology that our company have. Currently, I am working remotely, as a data analyst, where I
takes
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take
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 logs from the machine to do data mining.
However
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, I am keen to know the ins and outs of the process so that it can boost my efficiency at my
work
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, and give better output for my
work
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.
Moreover
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, working with engineers and technicians on-site can
helps
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help
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 to comprehend the concept in a better manner. As a part of my job, I do most of the
work
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 remotely
so
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, so
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 there will not be any
hinderance
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hindrance
 in my
work
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.
Furthermore
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, I will be taking my laptop and company phone with me so that I can
work
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 over there as well. I would like to request a
six month
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six-month
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 stay in
the
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a
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 hotel
at
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in
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london
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London
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, which would be
covering
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covered
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 in the benefit policy.
Besides
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,
If
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if
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 you would arrange a cabin or desk at the office, I can
work
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 efficiently and effectively over there. I am looking forward to hearing from you
for
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on
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this
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 matter.
In addition
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, any open line of communication in
this
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 matter could be highly appreciated. Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Rome

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task
State clear reason to go to the head office, give a plan for work while away, and how you will check progress.
structure
Make each paragraph hold one idea. Use simple link words to move from one idea to the next.
greeting closing
Open with a short aim and end with a note of thanks and next steps. Use a formal address and closing.
tone
Polite tone in the letter.
content
Shows plan to keep work going with laptop and phone.
content
Mentions learning and on-site work for better work.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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