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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart depicts the number of people in three different groups on the habit of eating fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from the year 2001 to 2008. The data was presented in percentages.
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, the data showed that Women had the highest number among all other groups in all years.
In contrast
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, Children consumed the smallest amount of fruits and vegetables from the beginning to the end of
this
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 period. In 2001, women stood at approximately 20% and kept on increasing until it reached its peak at more than 30% in 2006 before slightly decreasing.
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 the group of children began at just below 15% and held its position until 2003 , and started to gain its numbers by 2004 to above 15%, and had its highest percentage by 2007 at around 25%.
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 the Men of
UK
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 stayed in the middle between the other two groups throughout the period. kicking off with just under 20% and keeping its number for around 3 years before gaining more numbers, and reached its peak at approximately 27% in 2006. Showing an almost similar flow to the children

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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