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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The data
illusetrates
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illustrates
 the
avarege
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average
prices
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 change per month in the
prices
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 of Copper,
Nickle
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Nickel
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 and
Zinc
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 in 2014.
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, the
prices
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 of all metals fluctuated since January and
remain
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 steady by the end of the
year
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.
Nickle
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Nickel
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 price shows
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a
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significantly dropped
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 from January until the middle of the
year
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. In terms of
prices
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 from the
begining
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beginning
 of the
year
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 to June, Nickel declined between
Jan
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January
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 and March
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then
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, then
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 remained at
steady
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a steady
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 level after
that
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that,
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reaches
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reaching
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it’s
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its
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 lowest point in June. Meanwhile, the highest
prices
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 for
Zinc
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 were in February by 3% change ,followed by
,
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apply
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 a gradual decrease and faced the least change by the
mid
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mid-year
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year
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.
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, an upward trend is shown for
Zinc
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 in
first
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the first
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 2 months,
then
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 the rate declined as
the
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others metal
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other metals
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. Regarding the other half of the
year
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from
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, from
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 July to
december
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December
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, Nickel and
Zinc
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prices
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 fluctuated over the period. Meanwhile, copper price
incline
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inclined
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 at
first
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first,
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then
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 remained stable for the rest of the
year
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.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, zinc, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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