The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates how
many
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much
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gold
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was sold in
Dubay
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Dubai
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for a year in 2002. The units are measured in
million
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millions
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of Dirhams.
Overall
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, the
gold
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price fluctuated over the given period. For the first three months, the price grew, but
then
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continuously decreased for the next four
season
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.
However
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, the
gold
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sales
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up
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went up
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in August.
Then
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, the graph dropped down,
increase
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increased
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again, and
remain
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remained
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stable for the
last
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three months. The
gold
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sales
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peaked at precisely 350 in March. It
was
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significantly rose from around 200 in February. After that, the graph drastically fell
down
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and reached
it
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its
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lowest point at just above 100 in July. It was the same number for the total
gold
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sales
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in September
just
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after
hit
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hitting
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200 in August.
Furthermore
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, in the
last
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quarter of the year, the
gold
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sales
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had a relatively constant price just under 200.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gold, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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