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The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph presents the amount of
profit-making of
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 gold within 12 months in Dubai. Measured in units of
Dirhams
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.
Overall
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, March had the highest rate of
sales
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 with an amount of 350
million
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dirhams
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,
while
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 July and September had similar lowest wholesale throughout the year with around
of
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115
million
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 AED. At
first,
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it began with an amount of 200
million
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dirhams
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 in January and kept increasing till it reached 350
million
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 AED in March, which was the peak of
sales
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 among all months, and took a sharp decrease in
sales
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 and reached around 115
milllion
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million
 AED in July. After that, the rate of
sales
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 fluctuated till October with a wholesale
around
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of around
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 175
million
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dirhams
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 and hovered at the same rate till the end of the year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dirhams, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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