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The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the
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 line graph presents the
sales
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 of gold in Dubai, UAE, for 12 months in 2002. measured in units of
dirhams
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.
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, March had the highest
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 of gold
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 to other months,
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While
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while
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 July and September
was
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were
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similarlly
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similarly
 the lowest out of the rest of the months. At
first,
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in January,
It
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it
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 started with a 200
million
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dirhams
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 worth of gold, it rose a little in February around 225
million
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of
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dirhams
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 and took a sharp
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escalation
 and reached 350
million
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of
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dirhams
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 in March. After March,
it
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took
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 a great decline in
sales
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untill
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until
 it reached approximately 110
million
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of
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dirhams
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 in July and increased
back
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again to about 200
million
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of
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dirhams
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 in August.
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, from October to December, the rate of
sales
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 hovered around a rate of 175
million
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dirhams
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, dirhams, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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