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Band 4.5

*You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged.** **Write a letter to your friend. In the letter:** - **apologise for the damage to the item** - **explain what happened** - **say how you are going to fix the issue**

Dear Raneem I'm writing to you to
apologize
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apologise
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about
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for
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 your book that
you've borrowed
Verb problem
you lent
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 me recently. I left it on my desk and all of a sudden my cousin crashed into my room and spelled
a
Correct article usage
apply
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coffee on the book by mistake.
However
Linking Words
, I promise you that I'll bring you a new one, plus I'll make some cookies
hoping
Punctuation problem
, hoping
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 that
'll
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you'll
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 forgive me. All the best, Ghuyudh

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grammar
Use 'you lent me' or 'I borrowed from you' instead of 'you've borrowed me'.
grammar
Spill means 'to let coffee fall'; change 'spelled a coffee' to 'spilled coffee on it'.
content
Be clear on how you will fix it. Say when you will replace the book or give a new copy.
structure
Try to keep one idea in each part or paragraph and use link words like 'and', 'then' or 'so'.
tone
The apology is clear.
content
You tell what happened.
format
The ending is friendly.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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