You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter explain why you want to leave your current job describe what kind of job you are looking for ask for some help or advice

Dear Alan I'm writing to
you
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tell you that I want to quit my job because it is a demanding position, and there's so much pressure and stress from my colleagues.
However
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, I'm thinking about getting a new position at CCS company as a consultant
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I believe that I'll become more successful within the company environment than my current one. I've been considering
about
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them lately
and
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I think that they're the best choice for me. So, I want your help if there's any
advices
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advice
regarding the company or the position. I'll be grateful for any kind of help. All the best, Ghuyudh

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structure
Be clearer by using a simple plan: say why you want to leave, what new job you seek, and how the friend can help in three short parts.
language
Fix small grammar and word use: 'tell you' should be 'tell you', 'advice' not 'advices', 'considering about' should be 'considering', 'CCS company' may be 'the CCS company'.
form
Greeting and closing are there.
content-tocus
The letter states a clear goal to change job.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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