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The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph displays the total sales of
gold
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 in Dubai through 2002 in millions of dirhams.In
this
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eassy
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i
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I
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 will represent the given information.
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,
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It
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it
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 is clear that from the beginning of the year
2002
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2002,
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 the
gold
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 started
in
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at
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 200 million dirhams.There was a
slightly rose
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 in February followed by
highest
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the highest
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 percentage
which
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, which
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 was 350
millions
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million
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 in
march
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March
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.As it showed,
Gold
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 was dropping
by
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from
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time
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the time
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started
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it started
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 in April and stopped in July.
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 what is shown,
Gold
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 started to
rose
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up
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apply
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in August and reached 200
millions
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million
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. There was a
decreased
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 in September .
However
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,
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This
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this
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decreased
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 did not
last
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 long as it was followed by a
decreased
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decrease
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 in November and continued
to
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into
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 December.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gold with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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