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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table displays the key information
of
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 the
cost
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 of water in 5 cities in Australia.In
this
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article
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i
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I
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 will represent the given information.
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 ,
As
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it
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apply
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shown in the
table
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table,
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 the average bill per household
to
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 each city
are
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is
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 over $
300
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300,
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expect
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except
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 Melbourne
which
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, which
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 was $253.As for the usage charge per kilolitre (up to 125 KL
)
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),
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the highest city that
cost
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 $0.98 was Sydney.But the lowest
cost
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 was Perth
which
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, which
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cost
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 0.042 .The rest of the cities
cost
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 between $0.70
to
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$0.80.
According to
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what
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apply
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in
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apply
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the table,
About
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about
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 the
useage
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usage
 charge per kilolitre (over 125 KL
)
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),
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it is obvious that the
cost
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 in Adelaide rose by $1.00 .As for
Brisbane
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Brisbane,
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 there was a
slightly decreased
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by
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 $0.03.
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, Melbourne and Sydney stayed the same .
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,
There
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there
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 was a dramatic
decreased
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 in Perth
cost
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which
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, which
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 reached $1.50 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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