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Band 3.5

Pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The 2 graphs illustrate the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia
between
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over
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10-year
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a 10-year
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 period.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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Japan is superior in other goods and services,
while
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the
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apply
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Malaysia
to excel
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excels
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at
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in
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the
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apply
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housing.
Furthermore
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, Healthcare is the lowest in both
of
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apply
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countreas
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countries
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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