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Band 4

In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that many
countries
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people have to pay for medical
care
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 it is a commonly held belief that people should pay for medical
care
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 , there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion , I consider that
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 some think that it should be a free service provided by the government.
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 and you
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 not have many
who
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people who
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you
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can pay for
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 , medical
care
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 can
helps
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help
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 you
that
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, that
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 why you must have medical
care
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, my friend is
football
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 player with Ittenah club
he
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get injure
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got injured
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 in he is leg
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 he
don
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does
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 not have medical
care
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he
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pay
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has to pay
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 so much money . Another point to consider, free medical
care
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 for citizens .It is
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 possible to say that treatment takes place in government hospitals.
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 ,for medical
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student
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students
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 who his finished
medical
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their medical
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 can get more time
work
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to work
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 .
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my father when
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when my father
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he
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was
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a student
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student
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student,
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 many hospitals
want
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wanted
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 medical
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student
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students
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 to get many
docers
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doctors
, and my father
stay
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 20 years in
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 hospital. In conclusion , despite people having different
view
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views
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, I believe that for medical
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care
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care,
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 you must get it for any emergency for you or your family .
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Also
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 free service
provided
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is provided
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 by the government
if
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 they want free service
it
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, it
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 hospitals for small
problams
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problems
and
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, and
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 new medical
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student
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students
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they
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apply
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will
helps
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help
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 you
to
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apply
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get more
chance
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chances
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 to
be
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become
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 doctors.

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task
Plan your essay. State your view in the first paragraph. Then give 2 ideas with one clear example each.
coherence
Make the order clear. Have an intro, body with 2 or 3 ideas, and a short conclusion.
content
The topic is understood and you try to talk about both sides.
structure
There are real examples from life in the text.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal coverage
  • equity
  • fundamental human right
  • out-of-pocket expenses
  • financial hardship
  • preventative measures
  • social contract
  • quality of care
  • high demand
  • limited resources
  • tax implications
  • budget priorities
  • universal healthcare systems
  • public health
  • disease burden
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