The map bellow show changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st century. Summarise the information by reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Chi Vu)

The maps illustrate how the Lakeside
Town
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has changed between 2000 and 2009.
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, it can clearly be seen that there were huge transformations in the
town
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, especially the size of the woodland and the lake.
Moreover
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, the industrial complex
also
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got so much bigger over the period of time.
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a few
areas
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remain the same,
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as the river, the first residential area on the Northwest of the
town
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and schools, other
property
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properties
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been drastically transformed. In terms of The Lakeside
Town
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in 2000, there are three residential
areas
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, Derelict Warehouse, Old
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, schools, Arts Centre, and Industrial Complex.
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, there are a large woodland and a lake on the East side of the city. Regarding the change of the area in 2009, some old buildings have been converted to new ones.
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, the area of the warehouse and the old
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has been replaced by a car park, offices, and a university. It
also
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happened to the art centre , which has been converted into a multi-screen cinema. In 2009, residential
areas
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left only one field , and other
areas
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have been
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demolished.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, areas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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