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Band 4.5

The following maps show the changes in the town of Springer from 1970 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pictures demonstrate the changes that
has
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have
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 happened
at
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in
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the
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apply
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Springer town from 1970
and
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to and
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 current.
Overall
Linking Words
, in
1970
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1970,
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 there was only one road in the city that was connected with buildings and one large framland that located
at
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in
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 the south-east.
Also
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, there was a lot of area of
forest
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. Now
Punctuation problem
, at
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at
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in
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 the city are built a lot of buildings and
airport
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an airport
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.
Verb problem
have been built.
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 The area of
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forest
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forests
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are
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is
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 decreased.  In 1970, at the
upper
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top
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 of the picture,
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there was
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was
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were
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 two houses and
shop
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a shop
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 with many area of
forest
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. By
today
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today,
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 the west side
became
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has become
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 completely
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forest
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forested
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.
At
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In
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 the north are built two apartments and
airport
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an airport
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.
Also
Linking Words
,
left
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there is
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 little
place
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space left
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 for the
forest
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. In the middle of the map appeared
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a schol
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schol
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school
that
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apply
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surrounded from
the
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apply
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three sides by houses.
At
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To
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 the east, there
forest
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.  In 1970, at the bottom of the picture,
placed
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a large farmland
.
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was placed.
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 Now, the farm
decreased
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has decreased
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 in size and
located
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is located
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 in the corner of the south.
Near
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Nearby
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 built four apartments
.
Verb problem
were built.
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 At the
upper
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top
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 of the farm are built
house
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houses
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 with three shops. All the places
connected
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are connected
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 by road. 

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words forest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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