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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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alot
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a lot
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people
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visit
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place
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are
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the sahara
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sahara desert
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Sahara Desert
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Antarctica
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alot
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a lot
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people
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visit
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summeraise
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summarise
 the advantages and disadvantages.
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alot
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a lot
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 travels for
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first
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visitors
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culture
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people
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 try new food
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 deserts or
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antarctica
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people
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antarctica
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the sahara
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sahara desert
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Sahara Desert
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 because they don't know where they should
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where
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disadvantages
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 we see the important point from
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 visits and travels
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the sahara
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sahara desert
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Sahara Desert
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antarctica
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Antarctica
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this
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 the difficult conditions for
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tourists
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visit
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such
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 places.

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task response
Write a clear intro that states both sides and ends with a short conclusion.
coherence
Make four clear parts: intro, one para for pros, one para for cons, and a conclusion. Use linking words like first, also, but, and finally.
grammar
Use smaller sentences. Check grammar so verbs and plurals are right.
content
Give more full ideas. Explain why each point matters and add simple examples of places you have or want to visit.
grammar
Be consistent with tense and form (singular/plural).
task response
The essay shows both sides (pros and cons).
coherence
It uses places like Sahara and Antarctica as examples.
content
There are ideas on culture and food as benefits.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • cultural exposure
  • environmental awareness
  • risk
  • physical challenges
  • local economies
  • conservation
  • fragility
  • unique experiences
  • economic support
  • physical fitness
  • mental resilience
  • trekking
  • sustainability
  • infrastructure
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