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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Introduction
Nowdays
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Nowadays
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, alot
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alot
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a lot
 of
people
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visit
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place
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places
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are
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that are
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 difficult
like
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, like
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the sahara
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sahara desert
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Sahara Desert
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 or
Antarctica
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. There
is
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are
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alot
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a lot
 of advantages and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 for
people
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 who
visit
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this
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these
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 places .
we
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 will
summeraise
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summarise
 the advantages and disadvantages.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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is
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are
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alot
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a lot
 of benefits for
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this
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these
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 travels for
tourist
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tourists
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first
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. First
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 one it's
visitor
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visitors
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 learn
new
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about new
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culture
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cultures
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 from
other
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apply
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people
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live
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who live
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 there.
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Secondly
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secondly
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secondly,
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 try new food
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also
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, also
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 you can
visit
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there
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their
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person
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a person
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 from there.
Body paragraph 2
In contrast
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are
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alot
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a lot
 of disadvantages in
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this
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these
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 visits
for
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to
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 deserts or
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antarctica
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Antarctica
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for
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, for
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 example,there
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are
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alot
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a lot
 of insects
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also
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people
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missed
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get lost
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 in
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antarctica
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Antarctica
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 or
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the sahara
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sahara desert
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Sahara Desert
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 because they don't know where they should
going
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go
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 or
from
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apply
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where
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how
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 they
can
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get
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 back
for
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to
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them
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their
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 homes.
Conclusion
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summeraisethe
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summarise
advantages
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the advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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disadvantages,
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 we see the important point from
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this
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these
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 visits and travels
for
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to
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the sahara
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sahara desert
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Sahara Desert
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 and
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antarctica
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Antarctica
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. this
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this
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These
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is
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are
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 the difficult conditions for
tourist
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tourists
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 who
visit
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such
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 places.

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task response
Write a clear intro that states both sides and ends with a short conclusion.
coherence
Make four clear parts: intro, one para for pros, one para for cons, and a conclusion. Use linking words like first, also, but, and finally.
grammar
Use smaller sentences. Check grammar so verbs and plurals are right.
content
Give more full ideas. Explain why each point matters and add simple examples of places you have or want to visit.
grammar
Be consistent with tense and form (singular/plural).
task response
The essay shows both sides (pros and cons).
coherence
It uses places like Sahara and Antarctica as examples.
content
There are ideas on culture and food as benefits.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • cultural exposure
  • environmental awareness
  • risk
  • physical challenges
  • local economies
  • conservation
  • fragility
  • unique experiences
  • economic support
  • physical fitness
  • mental resilience
  • trekking
  • sustainability
  • infrastructure
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