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You had an appointment with the bank and now you realized that you can't make it for that. Write a letter to the manager Give details about your appointment and dates - Explain the reason why you cannot make it Ask for other dates

Dear Sir, I am Vipanjit resident of Surrey, BC. I am writing
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 letter to inform you about my meeting 1234 that I
am
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will
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 not
able
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be able
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 to join it. I booked my appointment on 31
Februrary
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February
 for my personal account number 123456. It's about adding lines
on
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 my credit and credit history. I booked
this
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 meeting by contacting the bank authority urgently. Unfortunately, I won't be able to make it because I have my specialist appointment on that day.
In addition
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 to
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, on the day my close relatives are coming to visit me. I really
apologize
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 to you
about
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for
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 the cancellation of
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 meeting. I request you, if you can suggest
me
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apply
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other available dates, so that I can re-book it. If possible,
Can
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 I do
in-between
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it between
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 10 to 19
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February
.
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 If you have any questions about
anything
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 you can call me at 1234567 or email
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me at
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 [email protected]. I hope you will understand my
situtation
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. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Abc

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facts and dates
Dates are not real. 31 February is not a real day.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with why you write, then give the ask for new dates.
language
Use short and clear words. Keep the voice calm.
greeting and closing
Close with a polite sign off and your name.
content
Include only what is needed: reason, new dates, contact.
tone
Polite tone used.
task
You say you want a new date.
content
You give contact by phone and email.
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