The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables compare information about how Fairtrade*-labelled
coffee
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and bananas
sales
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changed in five European
countries
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in 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Coffee
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sales
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rose in all
countries
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.
In contrast
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, the figure
of
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for
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Banana
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sales
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decrease
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decreases
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for two
countries
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.
Additionally
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,
both
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Coffee
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and
Banana
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sales
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were highest in the UK. Regarding
coffee
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, the
sales
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increase
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have increased
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significantly
double
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in Switzerland.
However
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,
while
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the former rose dramatically to 20m, the latter remained relatively stable. There was little difference between the figures for Belgium (1m) and Sweden (0.8m), and
both
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experience noticeable increases to 1.7m and 1m, respectively. In terms of
banana
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sales
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,
UK
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the UK
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had the highest
banana
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sales
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in
both
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years, as they rose over threefold from 15 million euros to 47
m
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million euros
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. Swiss
sales
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were originally almost twice as high as those of Denmark (1 and 0.6m, respectively),
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both
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and both
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countries
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rose
reaching
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, reaching
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5.5 and 4m.
In contrast
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, the figures of Sweden and Belgium (2 and 1.8m, respectively)
,
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apply
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both
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decrease
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decreased
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nearly
halved
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in half
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to reach about 1m in 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sales, countries, banana, both, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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