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The line graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.

The line graph compares the average amount of carbon dioxide
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 produced per person in 4 EU countries, namely the
UK
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,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal, over a
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period
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 of 10 years starting from 1967
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 the CO
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 missions in the
UK
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 and
Sweden
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 followed a downward trend, Italy and Portugal saw a significant increase in their figures. Despite a steady decline, the
UK
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 remained the largest entire period. In 1967, the amount of CO2 released by an average person in the
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uk
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 stood at approximately 11 metric
tonnes
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.
This
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 figure experienced a gradual decrease to around 9 metric
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 by 2007. A more dramatic change was seen in
Sweden
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, where
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 rose
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 9
tonnes
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 in 1967 to a
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 of just over 10
tonnes
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 in 1977, before falling sharply to about 5.5
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at the end
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 of the period.
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, the
emissions
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 in Italy and Portugal showed a consistent upward trend . Starting at 4 metric
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 in 1967, Italy's figures grew steadily to nearly 8
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 in 1997 and remained stable until 2007. Portugal, which
initially
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 had the lowest
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 at only 1 tonne, saw the most rapid growth, with its figures climbing to reach the same level as
Sweden
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 in the final year.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, uk, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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