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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs demonstrate data about the number
visitors
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of visitors
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 to three museums throughout the period
june
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June
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 and
september
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September
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 in 2013.
Overall
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, the line graph shows that
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the british
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british
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British Museum
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museum
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 is
most
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the most
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 visited throughout the
period
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period,
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while
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 the other
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museum
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museums
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demostrate
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demonstrate
 a
slightly
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slight
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 decrease over
the
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apply
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time.
First,
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in
june
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June
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 we can see that
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the british
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british
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British Museum
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museum
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 has reached
it all the time
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its all-time
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 high by approximately 750 visitors, afterwards from
july
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July
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till
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to
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august
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August
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 the number of viewers decreased significantly from 750 to 500,
after
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that
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 the number of visitors increased
slighly
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slightly
 by about 650
person
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people
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.
in
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other
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the other
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hand
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hand,
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 we can see that the science
museum
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 and natural history
museum
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demostrate
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demonstrate
 a
dropped
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 roughly from

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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