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The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents is to raise the age limit for younger drivers and lower the age limit for elderly ones. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowdays
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Nowadays
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 the number of traffic accidents has
been
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apply
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increased ,
That
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makes
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has led
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 many
pepole
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people
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to give
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theire
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their
 ideas about it
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, like
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 the
age
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 limit. Driving needs focusing and many other important things to be in the driver like that he need to be wise ,
this
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 will help him taking chooces ,
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 here we can see that reducing the minumum
age
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 for drivers will help decreasing the accidents signfintly because young pepole aren't wise enough to relying other humans lifes on them , and same thing for old drivers when they reach an exact
age
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 they won't be able to focus or to see clear , they can't even act fast in some actions . As a
driver
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driver,
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i
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I
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 support the idea of reducing and putting
maximum
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a maximum
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age
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line
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limit
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,
humans
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human
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 life
it's
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is its
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 red line
it's
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, it's
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 not a game.

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task response
State your view clearly at the start. The task asks if you agree or disagree. Make your stance plain in the first paragraph and keep to it.
coherence
Use clear link words and make new paragraphs for new ideas. Give each idea a clear topic sentence.
task response
Add more simple facts or examples to back each point. Say how age can slow reflex or vision and how this can affect road safety.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use simple words correctly so your point is clear.
content
You show a personal view on the issue.
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Some reasons are given to support the view.
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There is a general idea of how age can affect driving.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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