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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The chart details
on
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the weekly income spending of a family in a country in 1968 and 2018. Looking from
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overall
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an overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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 food has dominated the weekly spending in 2018
and
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, and
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 leisure has the highest portion of the spending of weekly income.
First,
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in 1968, fuel and power
has
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had
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 the lowest
number
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amount
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 of spending by approximately six
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percent
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per cent
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.
Conversely
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, meals
has
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 the biggest portion of weekly spending, staying
in
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at
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 35
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percent
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per cent
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. On the other side, several aspects
has
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have
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 comparable
figure
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figures
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. Housing and clothing
has
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account for
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 one
of
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in
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 ten
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percent
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per cent
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 of
overall
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 spending,
while
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 household items, personal goods, transport, and leisure staying
at
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for
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 less than ten
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percent
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per cent
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.
Additionally
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, in 2018, the trend has completely
change
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 as leisure
dominating
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dominated
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 the chart, spending more than twenty per cent of total spending. Fuel and
individual's
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individual
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 goods rank the lowest, resulting in less than five
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percent
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per cent
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. To add more, clothing and
footware
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footwear
 spend five
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percent
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per cent
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 of the weekly spending.
Lastly
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, household items, food, housing, and transport
staying
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stay
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 in the middle, ranging from less than ten per cent
until
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 approximately nineteen
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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