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The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country between, namely timber, pulp, and paper from 1980 to 2000.

The data presented in the line graph illustrates the
production
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 of three various forest industry products in a European nation, which are timber,
pulp
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, and
paper
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between
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, between
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 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is evident that all three products increased over the period.
In addition
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,
although
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 the
prodution
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production
 of
pulp
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 was the highest in the first
year
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, it was replaced by
paper
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production
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 in the final
year
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. In 1980,
paper
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 was the lowest
product
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 produced compared to the other two products, registering just 4
million
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tonnes
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.
However
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, its trend saw a dramatic rise over the years, finishing at 12
million
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tonnes
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 in the final
year
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.
This
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 established
paper
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 as the most produced
product
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 in
the
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2000.
Additionally
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, both timber and
pulp
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production
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 fluctuated throughout the period. In
1980
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1980,
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 timber
production
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 was around 5
million
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tonnes
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,
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then
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 it increased sharply to 10
million
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tonnes
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 in 1985.
After
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this
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 period, its
production
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 varied, ending the
year
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 with just under 8
million
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tonnes
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.
Similarly
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,
pulp
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production
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 was about 5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1980
,
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 its trend fluctuated throughout the years
,
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 before finishing at 10
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000. Despite starting out as the least produced type of forest industry
product
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,
paper
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 became the most popular
product
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, pulp, paper, year, product, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Timber production
  • Pulp production
  • Paper production
  • Fluctuations
  • Steady growth
  • Technological advances
  • Demand
  • Market demand
  • Sustainable practices
  • Deforestation
  • Production levels
  • Comparisons
  • Trends
  • Policy changes
  • Patterns
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