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The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
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 let us know the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in
this
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 training. We will
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 the important
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points
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 in
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Firstly
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, the second
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 in communication with clients
around
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is around
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 10%.
Then
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 in the
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chart,
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 the highest percentage in holiday travel it's 46%. Business travel it's 17%.
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in
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 personal interest it's around 15%.
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 other reasons around 13%.
Secondly
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,the first
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the
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shows the
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 lowest percentage
distant
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 learning
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, it's
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it's
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 5%.
While
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 the highest
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per cent
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 it's part-time training(evening)
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, around
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 39%. Self-tuition 22%.intensive training around 12%.
the
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 part-time training (weekends) it's equal
with
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self-tution
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self-tuition
 22%.
To sum up
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,we
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summarise
 the important points in both
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.
the
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chart
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showes
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shows
the
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the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in
this
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 training percentage for each
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 81%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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