The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The graph and table show data about the global usage of
water
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categorised by three sectors from
year
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apply
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1900 to 2000 and
water
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consumption in Brazil and Congo in 2000.
Overall
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, the general trend of all sectors shown in the graph
are
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is
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increasing
and
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, and
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the table presents a significant difference in the comparison of
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this
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these
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two
counties
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countries
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. For the chart of
water
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demand worldwide, the
most
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largest
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water
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consumption is in the agricultural sector, which
is
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has
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consistently
being
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been
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along
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over
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the
100
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past 100
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years.
Furthermore
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,
water
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allocated for the other two sectors
show
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shows
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a similar number for the first 10 years
with
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, with
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slightly more for the industrial use.
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,
start
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from approximately 1951
until
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to
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2000, the field of industry experienced
a
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significant growth.
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,
in
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Brazil has
176 million of
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of 176 million
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population and the
water
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consumption per person is 359
metres cubic
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cubic metres
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.
Contrastly
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In contrast
,
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the Cemocratic
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Cemocratic
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Democratic
Republic of Congo has 5,2
millions
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million
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of population
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people
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and each person
only
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consumes only
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consumed
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apply
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8
metres cubic
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cubic metres
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • distribution
  • agriculture
  • industry
  • domestic
  • sector
  • trends
  • discrepancies
  • sustainability
  • resource management
  • environmental impact
  • efficient
  • scarce
  • irrigation
  • desalination
  • sanitation
  • water-intensive
  • renewable resource
  • per capita
  • infrastructure
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