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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The both
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Both
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of
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the graph and the table illustrate key data about the use of water and
also
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 the consumption in two
sparate
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separate
country
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countries
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
,
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 you can notice the
increasing
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increase
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of
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in
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agriclture
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agriculture
 was
dramaticlly
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dramatic
 in the global water use.
In addition
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, it
didnot
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did not
 stop that rise to the year 2000,
whereas
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 the industrial use
wasnot
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was not
 that high
as well as
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 the
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agriclture
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agriculture
. In terms of
in
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the graph, the most
rising
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significant rise
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 is the
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agriclture
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agriculture
which
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, which
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is
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apply
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increased
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from approximate
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approximate
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approximately
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to
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500 km in 1900 to 3000 km in 2000. The opposite for both
of
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the industrial and domestic
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sectors were
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were
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was
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 too low compared to
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agriclture
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agriculture
.
According to
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waht
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what
 is shown, in the
table
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table,
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 you will see the consumption in Brazil is 359 per person
and
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, and
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 the population's cost is 176 million. Following
that
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that,
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 the other country is
Democratic
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the Democratic
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 Republic of Congo, the population is less than Brazil
with
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, with
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 5.2 million, but as you can see
the
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, the
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 consumption of water is only 8 per person.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriclture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • distribution
  • agriculture
  • industry
  • domestic
  • sector
  • trends
  • discrepancies
  • sustainability
  • resource management
  • environmental impact
  • efficient
  • scarce
  • irrigation
  • desalination
  • sanitation
  • water-intensive
  • renewable resource
  • per capita
  • infrastructure
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