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Some people say history is one of the most important subjects in schools .other people think that in today’s world subjects science and Technology are more important than history Discuss both this views and give your own opinion

Both
history
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 and
science
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 are very important topics to teach in
school
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.
While
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 other people view
science
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 and technology as the most important subjects in
school
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,
other
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others
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 people are
disagreeing
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 with them, and they see that
history
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 is the most important subject we learn in
school
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. I agree with
history
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 being
the
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an
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 important subject we learn in
school
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, and I will explain my opinion in
this
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 essay. As we
know
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know,
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history
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 can teach us so many things, mistakes,lessons, that till
this
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 day we still discuss.
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example
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 the
affect
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effect
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 that
nukelere
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nuclear
 power has,that till now it still
affect
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affects
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 the world, the reactor that
expolded
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exploded
 in
russia
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Russia
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 that caused
peoples
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people's
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life
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lives
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. Technology and
science
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 without a doubt
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have hepled
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hepled
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helped
 humanity in
acheiving
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achieving
 wonders, discovering the moon,
cure
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curing
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disess
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diseases
 like the fever, inventing planes and cars, and so many things that we use in our daily life.
but
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But
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 all of that wouldn't happen if it
wasnt
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weren't
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 for
history
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,
history
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 teaches us to learn from our past mistakes and avoid them.
Nevertheless
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. I agree with the people who view
history
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 as
the
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an
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 important subject we must learn at
school
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,
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 Even though
science
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 and technology helped us
accomplishing
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accomplish
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 wonders,
It's
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it's
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history
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 that pushed us to avoid making the same mistake.

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Task response
The essay makes a clear view and keeps to one side. To raise score, add more depth by giving more ideas and simple examples about history and science.
Grammar/Style
Some long and joined sentences make the essay hard to read. Use short, clear sentences and clear links between ideas.
Coherence
Try to have clear paragraphs. Start each with a small idea sentence and add a line to connect to the next idea.
Task response
The writer writes on a real topic and states an opinion clearly.
Content
The idea that history teaches us from past mistakes is good and clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • cultural awareness
  • social, economic, and political developments
  • critical thinking
  • analytical skills
  • innovation
  • economic development
  • practical skills
  • problem-solving
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  • climate change
  • healthcare
  • technological fluency
  • digital literacy
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