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Writing Samples
Band 4

The most effective way to solve the current traffic and pollution problems in cities is to encourage people to move from the suburbs or countryside into the city centre. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a trend for
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 majority of people to hold an opinion that the relocation of citizens from suburbs to
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megapolises
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possitive
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positive
 environmental effect and help to resolve the traffic and contamination obstacles. I do not agree with
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viewpoint
and
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 I strongly believe that mass migration will have
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 effect
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 that requires dramatically
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existed
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 urban areas.
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, I confirmed that
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 developing
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green energy
transport
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became
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 vital nowadays. First of all, it requires
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 necessary steps by
authorities
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the authorities
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 before the idea of relocation
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becomes
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 practical.
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, present
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many
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 cities are already
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experiencing
 tremendous pressure
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 overpopulation and road, water supply,
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and heating
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infrustructure
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infrastructure
 must be significantly developed and
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 before
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they
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 will be able to support additional
amount
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amounts
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 of new citizens. Without mentioned changes, the relocation of the rural
habitants
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inhabitants
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 could be a
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beginning
 of
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a deasaster
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deasaster
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disaster
 because the growing population will cause
of
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uncontrol
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 additional traffic and pollution.
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, a vast range of
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megacities
 in China
like
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, like
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Beijing
 faced with huge air contamination
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overcrowd
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.
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,
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the integration
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 of new energy
transport
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 could be a good trigger for global environmental changes in the cities. No need
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 that modern hybrid or battery
transport
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 has zero CO2 emissions or nearby. There is
the
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a
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 main reason for the rapid increase in the amount of new energy public
transport
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 in developed and developing countries. As the best example of positive shifts in environmental issues via new energy
vehicle
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vehicles
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 is
–
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apply
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Shanghai
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Shanghai,
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 where around 80% of all private and public
transport
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 has
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instead
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 of internal
consumption
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combustion
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 engines. In conclusion, the cited
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evidence
 provides strong support for the point of view that the migration from out into the cities idea is not the most effective
to
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way to
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 resolve the traffic and pollution issues nowadays.

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language
Use simple, short sentences and fix many spelling and grammar errors.
structure
Give a clear main idea in the first paragraph and keep one idea per paragraph to show your view.
content
Add more clear examples that fit the task and show how the plan would work or not.
lexis
Check spelling and choose easy words; avoid hard words that are not needed.
stance
You show a clear view that moving people to the city is not the best solve.
content
You use some examples to back your point.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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