The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the food consumption in Australia during the period from 1950 to 2010.
Overall
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while
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the five foods exhibited different trends over the given period, three followed an upward trajectory,
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the other two showed a decline.
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, the rates of increase and decrease varied significantly between them. As the graph shows, Vegetables and fruit started at 140
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and 80
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Vegetables rapidly dropped in 1970 and continued increasing and decreasing until 1990, before dramatically rose, followed by the fruit slowly fell by 1970,
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drastically crept until 2010.
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, the Bread began at 40
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then
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moderately grew to around 70
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and
then
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slightly declined until 2010.
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, The Meat commenced at almost 110
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by 1950,
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slowly climbed until 1990 before jumping down. Regarding the Sea food continued the same general pattern until the end of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words kg with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • dietary preferences
  • staple foods
  • health awareness
  • rising health concerns
  • shift towards healthier eating habits
  • intake
  • notable trend
  • significant feature
  • consumption
  • reflecting changing
  • availability
  • a decline towards
  • initially increased
  • steady rise
  • marked decrease
  • period of stability
  • dramatically
  • a sharp rise
  • gradual change
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