The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart illustrates the profit of various kinds of video
games
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(Mobile Phone, Online, Console and Handheld) across the world from the
year
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of 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the amounts of
sales
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was
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were
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always highest in every
year
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for handheld
games
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, its
sales
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increasing slowly from 2000 to 2006.
On the other hand
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,
demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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console
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game
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games
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decreasing span
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has decreased
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over the
6
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past 6
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years.
Moreover
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, there
was
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were
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no
any
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apply
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sales
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of mobile phone
games
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for
first
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the first
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two years.
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Also
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Also,
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the
sales
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of Internet
games
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absent
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were absent
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in 2000. In 2000, in the global market, Console and Handheld
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game
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games
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was
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were
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only available.
Internet
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The Internet
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game
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was available in next
year
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. The demand
of
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for
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paid mobile
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game
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games
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first showed in 2002
which
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, which
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users
was
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apply
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rapidly
grow
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grew
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in
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apply
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every
year
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.
This
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trend is
also
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showed
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shown
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in online
games
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. The profit from console
games
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almost
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was almost
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half
compare
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compared
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to handheld
games
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in
first
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the first
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year
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. But
in
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apply
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last
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year
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it was six times less than handheld
games
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, which
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which
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whose
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sell
was
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were
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roughly around 18 billion dollars. In comparison, the demand
of
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for
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games
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across the world
increasing
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is increasing
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rapidly
in
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apply
show examples
every
year
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except
console
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for console
show examples
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game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words games, year, sales, game with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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